Post by njrk97 on Sept 26, 2016 12:23:50 GMT
I was just asking,helps me get a gauge just in case people are new and i don't realise it.
As I mentioned the issues are just some small contradictions in the history, most gems under PD were made on Earth, so it may be awkward for her to be under Pink Diamond and be the last gem made on a dying planet (Since,well,Earth).
and just that some parts of your sentences repeat the same info. You mention in one line she is a combat medic,then in the next sentence say she was made for fighting and healing, which is somewhat redundant (Its a given that a combat medic is a medic designed for healing and combat.). That was just the main thing i was mentioning when i said contradictions, just that part.
The final part was just your character arc, what do you mean by the 'Homeworld arrival thread' i know the thread your referring to but that not really a arc just a small plot event, arcs are more like the character development in the show IE:
The Peridot Redemption storyline,where overtime Peridot started to care for the earth.
Or amethyst slowing getting over her inferiority complex.
Stuff like that
I know this can be annoying having to change stuff a bunch (Trust me i've been in your position many times on other sites.) but its just part of trying to get every character to slot into the Site's universe neatly, as this site was meant to focus more on Play by paragraph and be somewhat more professional writing then the more causal RPing of the Fanfic and Fanon wiki Roleplays,which were based more of play by sentence. If that makes sense.
As I mentioned the issues are just some small contradictions in the history, most gems under PD were made on Earth, so it may be awkward for her to be under Pink Diamond and be the last gem made on a dying planet (Since,well,Earth).
and just that some parts of your sentences repeat the same info. You mention in one line she is a combat medic,then in the next sentence say she was made for fighting and healing, which is somewhat redundant (Its a given that a combat medic is a medic designed for healing and combat.). That was just the main thing i was mentioning when i said contradictions, just that part.
The final part was just your character arc, what do you mean by the 'Homeworld arrival thread' i know the thread your referring to but that not really a arc just a small plot event, arcs are more like the character development in the show IE:
The Peridot Redemption storyline,where overtime Peridot started to care for the earth.
Or amethyst slowing getting over her inferiority complex.
Stuff like that
I know this can be annoying having to change stuff a bunch (Trust me i've been in your position many times on other sites.) but its just part of trying to get every character to slot into the Site's universe neatly, as this site was meant to focus more on Play by paragraph and be somewhat more professional writing then the more causal RPing of the Fanfic and Fanon wiki Roleplays,which were based more of play by sentence. If that makes sense.