Green Tourmaline

[Tourmaline]

Name:
Tourmaline


Appeared Gender:
Male


Appeared Age:
14


Gemstone:
Tourmaline


Gemstone Location: Neck/Chest Area


Corrupted: No


(If Corrupted)Monster Form: 
Appearance: 


Personality: Tourmaline is very smart, though he hates to say something really technical, and be the only one to understand it. He gets shy when he meets new people, but toughens up when his friends need him. He tries to stay positive, and when you need anything just ask! Though people do get upset when he gets into his "Smart Talk". He also can remember everything he has seen, heard, felt, tasted, and Smelled. Tourmaline has also become fascinated with ballet though he didn't know that it was mainly a "girls" sport. Tourmaline tries to work independently, but cant help it! He stands at 4"8'.


Likes/Dislikes:

Likes: Studying, Being near Nature, Machines, Building and caring for the planet Earth.

Dislikes:  Those who try to destroy natural things ,Corrupted Gems, and Fighting.


Fears:
Has a fear of one day turning into a corrupted gem. Fears cracking his gem. Being captured by homeworld.


Weapon: Tourmaline can summon Double Sais, They remind him of himself small, agile, quick, and decisive.




Ability 1: Electrical Charge. Tourmaline's are highly valued as electrical tuning circuits for conducting television and radio frequencies. With this power Tourmaline can launch electricity blasts and can Increase the power of a transmission. 


Ability 2: Scrying. Tourmaline's were traditionally used to point out a cause of trouble or an offender, and to indicate a good direction in which to move. With this tourmaline can see in any direction within 30 miles. With this its used as either a scouting tool or a locating tool. However this leaves him vulnerable to attack when in use.


Fusions: N/A


History:     Tourmaline grew up on gem Homeworld and although young he ended up being quickly inducted into the Yellow Diamond military division. His skills were put to work in the specialisation of the communication hub tech. His job was to travel to several different planets and to boost and maintain the communication hubs. One of his assignments landed him on Earth, it seemed like a pretty standard job, repairs and boosting but Tourmaline being ever astute was quick to notice something off about this particular job. Often time he seemed to be quickly ushered off as soon as his work was done, not being let back in by the stern guards that seemed to have the mysterious insignia of a pink diamond on their uniform.



He initially blew the cold reception off but as time passed his suspicion grew. Eventually his curiosity outweighed his caution and with a carefully attuned Scrying burst he managed to catch the back end of a transmission between two of the gems. He had never seen her in person but he knew straight away who the gem was on the screen
"I'm not a patient gem Pink Diamond" Yellow Diamond stated

"I'm aware and the project is nearly finished, soon the injectors will be completed and all can go ahead as planned"

"Good, i'm going to transfer more of my workers over, i know a particular gem with a knack for boosting electrical equipment, he might speed up the process abit"

"If you insist" Pink muttered

"I do" Yellow snapped back,with that the transmission cut off.



Tourmaline had a uneasy feeling about the entire situation, Kindergarten, injectors and he had a pretty good idea of what gem was going to be transferred to the project. Tourmaline ended up going with his gut and that day fled the communication hub, vanishing into the vast human world. He never saw anymore transmissions after that, from what he heard the hub went completely silent shortly after that, and the first time he saw that pink gem ended up being the last for a very long time. For two years he remained blended in with humans, lying low and avoiding most other gems. Finally though he risked going back to the communication hub and on that day he finally saw the pink gem again. This time she was the one on screen and her message reinforced the feeling he had about the kindergarten. IT made him feel sick realising how close he had been to helping with that project, now though he decided the time for hiding was over. He knew he had to stop what homeworld was doing, but he could not be discovered or he would be forced to continue the devious work. With some time to think he knew he had to stop what the kindergardens were doing, this though was only the beginning for Tourmaline.


Character Arcs: Try to find a way to hide from homeworld. Establish a base. Truly decide what he will do for himself.

[njrk97]

History is very short and doesn't align with site cannon, I suggest you read the opening plot and steven-universe-rp.proboards.com/thread/608/dissemination?page=1&scrollTo=3812 to understand how the sites history works out.

Remembering everything that he encounter probably wouldn't be a ability either, simply it would be in your personality that your character has a photographic memory. Your second ability seems somewhat pointless aswell, gems can generally regenerate pretty quickly (On here its really only a post or two at least before you can reform after releasing your physical form).

[Tourmaline]

Is this better? Please tell me if you think his abilities are overpowered.

[njrk97]

apart from the fact you have given no information about either ability i cant really allow them anyway. Psychic abilities take control away from the other player and manipulating gravity is very absolute.

Look at your gemstone and see if you can have a ability based around that. Green Tourmaline has a high magnetic point, so you could have a power linking in with polarity . Tourmaline is know to have one of the widest range of colours. colour based power, colours are light, light based powers. Tourmaline is found in marble, marble is rock,earth powers. You get the idea, do some research about your gemstone, where its found, how its treated to become a proper gemstone, what are its properties, what different about the green variation from the others and so on if your lost for power ideas.

[Tourmaline]

I thought about what you said and made my gem more of what its about. Fun fact Green Tourmaline is used to heal bad relationships with male figures or role models...Its perfect for my dad

[njrk97]

What is the range on the electrical blasts, would they work like a lighting bolt where they only arc to conductive surfaces eg metals, characters, ect?

[Tourmaline]

Um maybe like 20 feet is the range of the Electric Blasts, and No they shoot out of his hands to wherever he aims them

[njrk97]

mention the range, perhaps cut it down to 15 ft, and then if they work like blast you might want to have it being 'electrically charged energy blasts' instead of electrokinesis (Since electrokinesis is the power to manipulate electrical charges Ie lighting with your mind). Maybe call it a "Ion Beam" if you want something that rolls of the tongue better.

[Tourmaline]

Fixed

[njrk97]

History doesn't entirely match up with the site canon, unless you mention that the time between him running away and hearing the message was a year at least. Yellow Diamond would view the kindergarten project, then a few months later Rose vanishes, 4 -5 months the disappearance becomes confirmed, even more time passes, several gems have become corrupted, Site actually starts, its been about a year and a few months then the message finally comes through.

So that would be like 3+5+7+14. So that's like 2 and a half years give or take between the cutoff and Roses message.

[Tourmaline]

So my history has to be 2.5 years worth oooor?

[Tourmaline]

After 2 hours of thinking and an hour of dreaming *I have lucid dreams meaning i control them* I literally dreamed up my history tell me what you think. btw I just may make the pink voice a character >.>

[njrk97]

I really don't like doing this, being on the receiving end myself i understand it can get irritating having to change stuff so much but your history still has the same problems as before. Ill try to simplify this down as much as i can and get to the core of the problem.

The Earth has been cut-off from Homeworld for 2 years at least before Roses transmission is received. That means that the communication hub has been broken for those two years aswell. Rose's message in steven-universe-rp.proboards.com/thread/608/dissemination? was the first message received in two entire years.

So in terms of Timeline for your history to fit it would need to go like this.
1. You overhear the message between Rose and Yellow
(Some time passes)
2. the hub is damaged and stops receiving transmissions
(2 years later)
3. The message from Rose comes through about the rebellion.

Another thing aswell, your entire history seems to be based around your gem being associated with communication hubs, yet you then randomly talk about how your character was powering the kindergarten. If i understand right it was meant to be that your gem was fooled into thinking he was boosting the hub but the power was actually being directed towards the kindergarten, but if that's the case why the secrecy, why couldn't he just be order to work at the kindergarten instead.

This may work better if your given a example, this would be how i would set it up. You don't have to use this if you don't want to but its sorta a template for what i mean in terms of following site canon with time.

Tourmaline grew up on gem Homeworld and although young he ended up being quickly inducted into the Yellow Diamond military division. His skills were put to work in the specialisation of the communication hub tech. His job was to travel to several different planets and to boost and maintain the communication hubs. One of his assignments landed him on Earth, it seemed like a pretty standard job, repairs and boosting but Tourmaline being ever astute was quick to notice something off about this particular job. Often time he seemed to be quickly ushered off as soon as his work was done, not being let back in by the stern guards that seemed to have the mysterious insignia of a pink diamond on their uniform.

He initially blew the cold reception off but as time passed his suspicion grew. Eventually his curiosity outweighed his caution and with a carefully attuned Scrying burst he managed to catch the back end of a transmission between two of the gems. He had never seen her in person but he knew straight away who the gem was on the screen "I'm not a patient gem Pink Diamond" Yellow Diamond stated
"I'm aware and the project is nearly finished, soon the injectors will be completed and all can go ahead as planned"
"Good, i'm going to transfer more of my workers over, i know a particular gem with a knack for boosting electrical equipment, he might speed up the process abit"
"If you insist" Pink muttered
"I do" Yellow snapped back,with that the transmission cut off.

Tourmaline had a uneasy feeling about the entire situation, Kindergarten, injectors and he had a pretty good idea of what gem was going to be transferred to the project. Tourmaline ended up going with his gut and that day fled the communication hub, vanishing into the vast human world. He never saw anymore transmissions after that, from what he heard the hub went completely silent shortly after that, and the first time he saw that pink gem ended up being the last for a very long time.  For two years he remained blended in with humans, lying low and avoiding most other gems. Finally though he risked going back to the communication hub and on that day he finally saw the pink gem again. This time she was the one on screen and her message reinforced the feeling he had about the kindergarten.  IT made him feel sick realising how close he had been to helping with that project, now though he decided the time for hiding was over. He obliged her request to the gems of Earth and decided to fight for this planet.With the flick of a hand he was marked with the stars of the resistance, this though was only the beginning for Tourmaline. 

[Tourmaline]

Before I rewrite history you said, "You don't have to use this if you don't want to but its sorta a template for what i mean in terms of following site canon with time." The beginning part is when you said I don't have to use this, are you saying im allowed to use your story for my history, or Use something similar to it as a template?

[njrk97]

Either option. I state specifically that you "don't have to use it", imply that, yes if you wish you can use it. OR you can try again making your own history.I was simply hoping that me writing out that history would give you a better indication of what i meant when i said that your old history didn't match up in terms of time, showing by a correct example instead of just restating what was wrong with your version. That way IF you wanted to try rewriting your history you then had a example with a correct timeline.

So just to reiterate
Option 1: Use the History I wrote out
Option 2: Try fixing your history. Just using my history then as a example for how the events in your history should be spaced out in terms of time.

If you want I can de-construct my history and show you the differences that allowed it to work in the site timeline when yours did not.